tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12354210.post113768684778296508..comments2023-08-13T08:56:47.540-04:00Comments on something katy: and i the poetkatyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07329161994664435636noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12354210.post-1138195228293831662006-01-25T08:20:00.000-05:002006-01-25T08:20:00.000-05:00How lucky the three are!(And I love "and i the poe...How lucky the three are!<BR/><BR/>(And I love "and i the poet, starting sentences with and"!)arch.memoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13902709126678545260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12354210.post-1137717605732465182006-01-19T19:40:00.000-05:002006-01-19T19:40:00.000-05:00they are three different peoples. and my goldfish ...they are three different peoples. <BR/><BR/>and my goldfish is rather pleasant company.katyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07329161994664435636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12354210.post-1137697971733190112006-01-19T14:12:00.000-05:002006-01-19T14:12:00.000-05:00thank you brian, i agree with the couplets argumen...thank you brian, i agree with the couplets argument. done and done.<BR/>will wrestle with the other suggestions later. thanks again :)katyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07329161994664435636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12354210.post-1137696938096452262006-01-19T13:55:00.000-05:002006-01-19T13:55:00.000-05:00Forgot to mention: line break after "am warm"--- a...Forgot to mention: line break after "am warm"--- and i the poet, starting sentences, am warm/ inside my house, with a gold fish as companyBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06044879677994516578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12354210.post-1137696740390969302006-01-19T13:52:00.000-05:002006-01-19T13:52:00.000-05:00Well, simply, I liked it. Add to the good list. bu...Well, simply, I liked it. Add to the good list. <BR/><BR/>but here's my suggestions: <BR/><BR/>put a comma after "glow" and cut "and the," replace it with "a"-- ...glow,/ a boy lay... <BR/><BR/>*<BR/><BR/>put a comma after "starting sentences" and cut "with and"-- ..., starting sentences, am warm inside...<BR/><BR/>*<BR/><BR/>Just a personal thing conserning the form, but I'd also cut: blanketingBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06044879677994516578noreply@blogger.com